You may have some potential, but this one might have been one for the scrap pile. Try again, have a script ready, practice, and splice in a low playing background music, (not necessary, but it would definitely help). Make your recordings clear and at a relatively good flow. If you follow all of these, and do it again, It will turn out much better! Keep at it!
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